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As earth runs out of natural resources, we have started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is the wrong thing to do, and instead we should look for alternative solutions here on earth. To what extent do you agree with them? What alternatives might there be to exploiting space for natural resources

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Nowadays, human beings are looking for the outer region from the
earth
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 atmosphere to find the ways of
energy
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-producing methods to sustain as a nation,
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 some of the population do not agree with the mentioned statement and their idea is to find new ways of
energy
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 generation technologies which were limited to the
earth
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. Since there were plenty of resources available in outer
space
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; really the chances are higher and
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 human beings already enriched with the necessary scientific knowledge,
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 a lot with the statement of surfing the outer
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, but with
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 some negative points due to the massive investment that need to sacrifice for the
space
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 researches. People are curious a lot about the behavioural nature of the outer
earth
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 for many centuries before, so tend to do researches on other objects like the moon and
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 other planets
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 as Mars, because whatever the process will do to take out the
energy
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sources
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 will not be affected the
earth
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. Digging petroleum wells on the
earth
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 surface is surely be harmful in the future as living beings on
earth
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, but no issues arise if any other planet or object is excavated. Since no one is going to protest for their lands, it is easy to continue the excavations on other planets, not as on the
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.
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-X; the project launched by Elon Mask currently involved in the process of finding new
energy
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sources
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. So, with the increasing
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 it is better to go beyond the limits and find
energy
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sources
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 from outer
space
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 is recommended. By the way, the initial cost is the issue over the
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 mine, and
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 as some people said, alternative solutions
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 as solar and wind
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 can be used as renewable
energy
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sources
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 since those are available freely on
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,
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 the required investments are comparatively lower for
this
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 solution over trying to search resources out from our planet.
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, the solar panel efficiencies are increasing rapidly, so the reliability increases for the solar
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. To conclude, despite some drawbacks of finding
energy
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sources
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 from outer
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, with the curiosity of the human population,
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 excavation has lots of benefits over finding
sources
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 within the
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 surface.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • circular economy
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • resource-intensive
  • environmental regulations
  • corporate responsibility
  • global cooperation
  • resource scarcity
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