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Nowadays some people have anti-social behavior and lack respect to others.What are the reasons? What are the solutions?

#people #behavior #lack #respect
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era
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 few individuals miss behave and
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 not give
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. There are numerous reasons behind it
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 multiple steps can be taken. The major reason strike to my mind is that, some
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parental guidance because nowadays
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 and they do not pay attention to
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behavior
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 of their children ,they watch violent episodes in their
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 which tends to make to make their
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behavior
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 against society.
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, illiteracy is
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 cause that
people
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 disrespect
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 , they have not learned basic ethics. To justify it, teachers teach pupils that if you
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 take
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 you give
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 spend
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large amount of time in front of social media they gain negative thoughts from celebrities. Moving toward
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, parents should give proper
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 to their offspring and keenly observe the
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behavior
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 of babies, so that they can improve their negative
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behavior
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 for
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 should build
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 centre where
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 can get together and
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 give
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 to each other.
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, authorities should improve the
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literacy
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 role in avoiding
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anti-social
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behavior
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 and to learn
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 language. In conclusion,
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 of proper education,
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influence of social media and
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 of time are the main cause behind
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behavior
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;
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, multifold steps can ve useful to mitigate the issue like improve
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literacy
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 rate and proper parental guidance.
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