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People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it.

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There is absolutely no doubt that in the 21st century , it is quite difficult to adjust their lives and occupation.
However
 , many citizens are trying to balance between their
job
 and resides and some of the individuals are successful in it. The prime hurdles people face is too much workload .
One
 possible solution would be
to
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proper
time
 management.
To begin
 with, there is
a
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one
 obvious reason why few people cannot balance between their
work
 and their lives.
Firstly
, Nowadays, in most
of
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organisations or industries, employers have to
work
 10-12 hours and it is compulsory for them. Due to the hectic
job
, too much pressure and workload on them so they cannot live happily as well as they cannot spend their quality
time
 with friends and family.
As a result
, few citizens are unable to adjust their
life
 with
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job
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jobs
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.
for instance
, According to Harward University stated, 50% of IT recruiters lived far from their residence so they did not enjoy their
life
 with colleagues and loved
one
's because they have to only focus
of
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 their
work
life
. Some solutions could be adopted in order to avoid
such
 a situation.Some individuals are aware
about
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 how to manage their
work
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life
 and prosperous
life
. If people want to live happily , they make proper
time
 management between their living
life
 and
job
life
.
Moreover
 , they have to give some quality
time
 to their loved
one
's because it is our
aspects
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 of
the
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life
 so if you are pleased
then
 you can automatically concentrate on
work
also
.
For example
, Rakesh jhunjhunwala
who
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is
the
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 well-known trader in the share market and he works for 6 hours. After his
job
 , he
do
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 some activities as well as live
entertainment
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an entertainment
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life
. To recapitulate, it is clearly
problem
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a problem
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 of
such
 complexity in
modern
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the modern
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 era that no solution is likely in short term.
However
, the prime hurdle is too much amount of
work
 and
this
 issue is tackled by
time
 management
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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