Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while ​    others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too.​     Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is commonly believed that
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decisions should
made
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by
managers
in the companies
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when many argue that
employees
also
have to take
a part
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to make a strategy.
Manager
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The manager
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is
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person that knows a lot about how to make great decisions,
however
, other workers
also
should introduce their ideas to develop the
company
that they work
.
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In my point of
view
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both
managers
and
employees
must help while finding new ideas. Some people support the opinion that only high-qualified
employees
like
managers
should make decisions in big companies. Because of the fact that
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managers
are know how to make perfect steps to improve the quality of
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the company
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.
In other words
, they have
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experience rather than simple
employees
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Furthermore
,
managers
can solve serious problems and can do
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actions that
leads
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the
company
to
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forwards.
On the other hand
, all
employees
are
significant
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part of the
company
. For that reason, they have to take care
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development
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of the business and share
with
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their ideas. Sometimes it might bring success and suitable benefits. In some cases, it helps
to
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employees
make
a
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great achievements and give
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opportunity to carrier growth. What is more, some wrong strategies of
managers
will be corrected by office workers.
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why
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many claim that it is useful to hear the opinion of
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coworkers. To sum up, all members of the
company
should participate
to
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making plans for
future
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of the
company
. And it gives the opportunity to be more creative and innovative which are the main
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criteria
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successful
company
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  • moreover
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • top-down approach
  • hierarchical structure
  • grassroots level
  • strategic planning
  • on-the-ground experience
  • inclusive management
  • employee engagement
  • democratic process
  • transparency
  • cohesion
  • morale
  • practical insights
  • long-term goals
  • mutual respect
  • resistance to change
  • team dynamics
  • broader perspective
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