The younger generation is mainly responsible for the latest technological developments. How far do you agree?

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At the present time,some people believe that the new
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is principally responsible for
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advanced technological
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with
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topic. It is obvious that the younger
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depending on
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modern
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and most importantly,
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latest technological
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is the key to career success in
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day and age.
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is mainly due to the fact that the 21st century is best characterised by communication with all
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generation
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day by day the younger
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increases their demands.
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they implement many kinds of new technologies
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their education and many other career fields. In
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situation, without
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technology
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they
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they try to all the time improvements and added different types of
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needs. They
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society
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, now there is a common
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that which
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involved on their technological developments those
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influence mostly all the modern
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age of change, I would
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that it is good and benefited for
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economy.
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, it is clear that in
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and future demand inspire the new
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to progress the modern
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fact involved with modern
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and advanced life standard. In conclusion, overall I would argue that for development the younger
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dependent on the
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and the new
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's advanced
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technological Altitude. It will keep great value in the future.
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