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Some people believe that universities should only accept students with the highest marks while others believe that some students with low marks should have an opportunity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The number of
people
 entering
universities
 has rapidly increased in the near decades. Given
this
 situation, some
people
 suggested that
universities
 should only accept
students
 with the highest marks in academics. While others oppose, believing that
students
 with low marks should be given chance to enter as well. In my perspective, low mark
students
 should
also
 be giving a chance to study at
universities
. On one hand,
people
 believe that
students
 that can get a high mark at school are astute. They have proven that they are talented and hardworking enough to get acknowledged by
universities
. By giving them opportunities to study in
universities
 can help them have a kick start on their future destined work field. Opponents,
on the other hand
, believe that the university grades alone can not access the genuine talent or calibre of every student and
therefore
, the lower grade
students
also
 should be allowed for
further
 studies.
This
 is because those
students
also
 have some ambitions and desires like to become a doctor or engineer but some circumstances make them frustrated their studies.
for example
,
students
 who come from a broken family, or could not focus on their studies and during examinations so
this
 does not mean that they are not talented or failed candidates.
Thus
, some
people
 advocate that
then
 the authority should offer an equal opportunity for both high and low-grade achievers at the institution. To conclude,
although
 higher rank
students
 can perform well
further
 academic career, I believe that everyone has the potential to study equally and choose their career for a better future. Unless enrolling everyone equally at the institute, there may be a chance to astray and sometimes they involve in doing unusual activities.
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