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University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, it is common that the majority of
students
 are intended to study abroad as a part of their education.
However
, there are certain advantages and disadvantages which could experience by the undergraduates.
This
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on to
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 both the pros and cons of
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 overseas to justify the answer. Analyzing the fact that to experience different countries, their cultures and learning to be independent by themselves without having their own family with them will prove
this
.
Firstly
, when the undergraduates travel overseas,
then
 there is a huge chance of
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leaning
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 about different countries, cultures, languages and as well as it will allow
to have
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 a wide knowledge with regard to the course in international aspects.
Furthermore
,
lot
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 of different individuals from several countries could
met
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 and it will allow
students
 to be more socialized in the future.
For instance
, the
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 carried out by the University of Colombo Sri Lanka
,
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 has pointed out that individuals who study abroad will
more
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intelligence
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 when they start working back in their home country.
Therefore
this
 makes clear that learning international will enhance more advantages to the pupils.
Furthermore
, the
students
 will be more independent while they survive alone in a country if they travel for studies.
For example
, the
students
 could continue
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 studies while working
part time
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 which leads them to balance their life while surviving.
On the other hand
, individuals could spend more money
for
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travelling abroad rather than being educated in a university in their
mother land
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.
Moreover
, they would leave their family and sometimes it may lead to
home sick
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 aspects. To summarize, a student who
travel
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 abroad to continue their studies in a university will experience various benefits.
Hence
, after thorough
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 I would mention that the advantages of
this
 outweigh the disadvantages.
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