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The Internet Has Replaced Traditional Books As Sources Of Information. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

#internet #books #sources #information
Nowadays, the
internet
 plays
vital
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 role in
the
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study. Some
people
 assert that cyberspace taking over the traditional
books
 as the source of information.
However
, both
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own
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 reasons to make
people
 lives easy with the use of information.
This
 easy I will discuss some benefits and drawbacks in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,
World
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 Wide Web is very famous in today’s generation. There are plenty of advantages
such
 as e-
books
 are easy to carry anywhere with us
also
 the cost of it is basically cheaper compare to normal
books
.
Time
 is
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 part of our life so with the use of
social
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the social
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site
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sites
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 we can find any information easily without west of
time
 in behind novel.
For example
,
in
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one research shows that many foreign youths are using e-book
instead
 of physical
books
. On
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 side, there are some drawbacks as well. Nowadays
people
 are spending most of
time
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 on
web
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 to reading news, story and many more. As the
result
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,result
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 they have to face some physical problems like
headache
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headaches
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, neck pain and so on.
Also
, for
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the internet
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internet
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 we need equipment
such
 as Wi-Fi,
internet
 device. Without
them
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 we can’t able to access
device
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the device
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. On the flip side, we don’t need any extra equipment for
live
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 book and it is easy to available.
For instance
, most
travelers
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 are using
books
instead
 of e-book because
of
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some times
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sometimes
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 Wi-Fi are not easily available in some lower areas.
Finally
,
people
 are using both as per the convenience
also
 both have pros and cons as well. I personally believe that normal
books
 are very convenient because
internet
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 is not reliable every
time
.
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