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The Internet Has Replaced Traditional Books As Sources Of Information. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

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Nowadays, the
internet
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 plays
vital
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 role in
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study. Some
people
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 assert that cyberspace taking over the traditional
books
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 as the source of information.
However
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, both
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own
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their own
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 reasons to make
people
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 lives easy with the use of information.
This
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 easy I will discuss some benefits and drawbacks in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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,
World
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 Wide Web is very famous in today’s generation. There are plenty of advantages
such
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 as e-
books
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 are easy to carry anywhere with us
also
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 the cost of it is basically cheaper compare to normal
books
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.
Time
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 is
important
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 part of our life so with the use of
social
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site
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sites
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 we can find any information easily without west of
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 in behind novel.
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one research shows that many foreign youths are using e-book
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 of physical
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. On
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other
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 side, there are some drawbacks as well. Nowadays
people
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 are spending most of
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time
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 on
web
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 to reading news, story and many more. As the
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 they have to face some physical problems like
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, neck pain and so on.
Also
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, for
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the internet
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internet
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 we need equipment
such
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 as Wi-Fi,
internet
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 device. Without
them
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 we can’t able to access
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the device
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. On the flip side, we don’t need any extra equipment for
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the live
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 book and it is easy to available.
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, most
travelers
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 are using
books
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instead
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 of e-book because
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some times
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sometimes
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 Wi-Fi are not easily available in some lower areas.
Finally
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,
people
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 are using both as per the convenience
also
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 both have pros and cons as well. I personally believe that normal
books
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 are very convenient because
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internet
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 is not reliable every
time
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.

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