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Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens more satisfied.

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It is believed by some specialists that when a country is developed richly, the extra economic growth can not bring more happiness to its inhabitants. From my point of view, I completely agree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples. In terms of the economic side, an over-developed economy can not give citizens more satisfaction because of the increasing need in society. What I mean is that because of the rising of consumption and life standard, many people may want to achieve more.
However
,
this
 phenomenon often brings anxiety and risk rather than happiness.
For instance
, a wide range of investors put a large amount of money in the stock market and many of them gain nothing and even lose their money. What’s more, some people even use the money to gamble, which may lead to excessive pleasure and loss of all the property.
On the other hand
, many developed countries are paying more attention to develop the culture and social well-being, which would raise the standard of their inhabitants’ living.
That is
 to say, their residents would be happier with the good healthcare system and environmental protection rather than the growth of the economy.
In addition
, many people choose to retreat back to the countryside
instead
 of living in bustling cities to enjoy the peace and tranquillity of nature and avoid economic pressure. In conclusion,
although
 the economy is a vital part of a country, I am of the opinion that a nation should focus more on mental fulfilment to bring more satisfaction to its citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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