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In many countries, governments spend large sums of money on the arts and this is supported by some taxpayers as worthwhile. Others, however, think that this money would be better spent on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is considered by many people that
government
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 should responsible for the arts, while others argued that spending
money
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 on fundamental human rights
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health
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 and
education
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 is a responsibility for the
government
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 to safeguard. In my opinion, the argument that it is better to spend
money
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 on
education
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 and
healthcare
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 is an argument
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 both advantageous and
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 by many. The two views will be thoroughly discussed and analysed before drawing a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, there are many several benefits that
government
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 should spend a large sum of
money
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 on
healthcare
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 and
education
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.
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, low-income families provide a chance to have an effective medical treatment
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 as the exorbitant cost of medicine.
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, the authorities can maintain the
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 of the population by increasing a spot for checking their
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 problem.
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, children and university students is an important role in developing countries. If all children and university students, the most significant resource for the country's development, have more
education
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 opportunities, the country will be more competitive at an international level.
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, it is not only
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 policy but
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 diets and a clean environment that
government
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 should spend
money
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 on.To start with, the
government
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 should play a role in an individual's diet.
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, if citizens have a lack power to buy a healthy diet, they can provide
health
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 problems
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 as high cholesterol and high level of sugar.
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 mean
government
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 should pay attention to the human diet.
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, it will provide many benefits if the
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 spent the
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 on
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such
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 as free healthy meal To summarize,
education
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 and
healthcare
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 is a significant part of human right that
government
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 should have a responsibility with.

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