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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulty getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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Our
body
 needs enough rest in order to function appropriately and sleep is the only possible way to provide enough rest to
one
's
body
. Though there have been various scientific studies that
claims
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importance
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 of having enough sleep, there are ample
of
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people out there who are suffering from sleep disorders. It is due to the following reasons.
Firstly
, stress is
one
 of the main
reason
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. In
this
 fast pace economy, everyone is striving hard to succeed
as a result
 it has increased the stress level, which indirectly has
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effected
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 the sleep cycle.
For instance
, stress induces
creation
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 of
hormone
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 that makes people worry and sleepless.
Secondly
, health conditions
also
 can interfere
sleep
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. Different kinds of health conditions have distinguished effects on the
body
.
For example
, A diabetic person pees frequently which cause disturbed sleep.
Thirdly
, Lifestyle
also
 matters. When a person does not sleep at
proper
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 time or sleep cycle varies it can impact his/her health adversely. Though there
are
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various
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 negative
effect
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effects
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 of not having proper sleep, people could reverse
this
 and can get enough sleep by
practicing
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healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle. To illustrate, yoga or regular exercise or following
healthy
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 diet can induce sleep and can help the
body
 to rejuvenate. By following these practices any person, who has been impacted by insomnia can lead a quality life. To conclude, it is true without sleep
one
 can go crazy and harm himself/herself, but there are various possible options which could be introduced in
one
's life to change
this
. These are the good habits of having full 6-7 hours
sleep
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, avoiding
coffe
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coffee
 or tea, sleeping at
same
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 time etc.
Hence
, slumber is the oil
which
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keep
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 the
body
 running.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sleep deprivation
  • immune system
  • cognitive function
  • mental health
  • chronic insomnia
  • accidents
  • productivity
  • stress management
  • sleep hygiene
  • relaxation techniques
  • health care costs
  • economic productivity
  • circadian rhythms
  • sleep disorders
  • meditation
  • yoga
  • stimulant
  • melatonin
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