Some students take a year off between school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is observed that some people prefer to travel and getting employed after completing schooling rather than attending college immediately.
This
essay illustrates how people benefited from
this
trend to getting practical
knowledge
but will
also
show that
this
can lead to
issue
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issues
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such
as students may lose their interest in
further
studies.
To begin
with, when youngsters start working anywhere, they
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their bookish
knowledge
in actual work and learned concepts in a new way.
This
will not only help them for gaining practical experience but
also
help them
for
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to
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earn money and finance their
further
education.
For example
, my elder brother took a one year gap before taking admission
in
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the university and joined an internship at
reputed
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organization to explore practical
knowledge
.
Furthermore
,
this
made him
to
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find
job
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easily and motivated him to make a career in his dream field.
On the other hand
, there are some problems that are significant,
firstly
, there are high chances that if students take a gap in their studies, they may start losing interest in their studies. Since they are
starting
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earn money, they will addict to it and they can decide to continue with their
job
instead
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for
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their course.
Secondly
, if they
are not find
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their desired
job
in a gap,
then
they feel demotivated and stressed.
Such
as, my relative daughter failed to find
job
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a job
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in her interest
of
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area
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the area
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and she felt demotivated and depressed. To conclude,
although
it gives chance to explore practical
knowledge
and earn money to finance their education,
but
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disadvantages of
this
trend outweigh the advantages. I believe that
this
trend can be considered
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positive
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a positive
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development.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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