Some students take a year off between school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
It is observed that some people prefer to travel and getting employed after completing schooling rather than attending college immediately.
This
essay illustrates how people benefited from this
trend to getting practical knowledge
but will also
show that this
can lead to issue
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issues
such
as students may lose their interest in further
studies.
To begin
with, when youngsters start working anywhere, they are apply
their bookish Change the verb form
are applying
knowledge
in actual work and learned concepts in a new way. This
will not only help them for gaining practical experience but also
help them for
earn money and finance their Change preposition
to
further
education. For example
, my elder brother took a one year gap before taking admission in
the university and joined an internship at Change preposition
to
reputed
organization to explore practical Add an article
the reputed
a reputed
knowledge
. Furthermore
, this
made him to
find Change the verb form
apply
job
easily and motivated him to make a career in his dream field.
Add an article
a job
On the other hand
, there are some problems that are significant, firstly
, there are high chances that if students take a gap in their studies, they may start losing interest in their studies. Since they are starting
earn money, they will addict to it and they can decide to continue with their Add the particle
tostarting
job
instead
enroll
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enrol
for
their course. Change preposition
on
Secondly
, if they are not find
their desired Change the verb form
do not find
job
in a gap, then
they feel demotivated and stressed. Such
as, my relative daughter failed to find job
in her interest Add an article
a job
of
Change preposition
apply
area
and she felt demotivated and depressed.
To conclude, Add an article
the area
although
it gives chance to explore practical knowledge
and earn money to finance their education, but
disadvantages of Remove the conjunction
apply
this
trend outweigh the advantages. I believe that this
trend can be considered as
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a
positive
development.Add an article
a positive
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...