Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in their exams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Education is the most crucial
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of people's lives. Some people are firm believers in rewarded the
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the most progress.
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essay will discuss both points of
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and most obvious reason is most students who get the highest grades eager to learn
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academic
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knowledge
, leading to self-study and
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learning after school. The rationale behind
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is their parent encourage and set up the goal for them so they have a clear goal to
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achieve
.
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, some students just only have the talent in memorizing the lessons which easier to get
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higher grade than the normal student.
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the greatest increase should get the reward
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because
these scores reflect their passions. According to
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local university research, it indicates that more than 80
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of top rank's students get higher
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scores
because of their
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is an
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integral
part to become successful. In conclusion, both choices have some
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situation. From my perspective, the formal examination can not
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that they are working hard. If
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themsleves
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themselves
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, they will get some rewards not only by the gift but
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moral support to do the better result in the future.
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