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Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live as a separate minority group with a different lifestyle. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Over the past few decades, the number of
people
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 who
immeigrate
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immigrate
immigrated
 to other
countries
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 has significantly increased. It is said by some that these
people
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 should adapt their lifestyles to the new
culture
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.
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, many
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 believe that they should stay separated, without changing their behaviours. There are many arguments in favour of the idea that
people
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 must behave the same when they move to a foreign country.
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 of all, one of the clear advantages of living separately as a minority group is that these immigrants will feel more comfortable. When it comes to staying in a different place,
people
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 will experience a range of difficulties
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 as
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 shock, being judged, and double standards. Research suggests that staying with
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 who have a common origin can help foreigners release their stress and survive in different cultures. Another positive aspect is that these
people
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 are able to celebrate their traditional events together.
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, most Thais who live in the USA occasionally gather and spend time together at Songkran Festival, April 13th.
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, there are several drawbacks of living with
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 from their
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. The most common criticism is the fact that these
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 will act strange when they socialize with locals. Statistics indicate that
people
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 who try to learn new
culture
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 will be more acceptable in their new
countries
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 while
people
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 who don't accept new
culture
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 will look like outcasts in front of locals. To sum up, I feel that
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 there are some clear advantages of living separately in a new country, accepting new
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 is still needed in order to survive in the new
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. In my opinion, the pros of learning new
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 outweigh those of living separately as a minority.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • assimilate
  • social cohesion
  • integration
  • navigating the job market
  • cultural preservation
  • sense of belonging
  • heritage
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural landscape
  • support network
  • transition
  • multicultural society
  • mutual respect
  • cultural identity
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