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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outwetgh the disadvantages?

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It is a common belief that self-driving
vehicles
 could not be replaced as it is a way that customer's
informations
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 could be leaked .
However
, there is a more persuasive opinion that
driverless
vehicles
 are actually operated safely. On one side of the argument, in the ever-changing world,
informations
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 play a vital role. Self-driving
systems
 would ensure their users a convenient service if they provide their private
informations
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information
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such
 as destinations, working schedules, etc... Those data is vulnerable to hackers.
Moreover
, people often support the idea that
such
systems
 could not execute unfortunate situations in
the
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practical traffics. According to a recent survey, American drivers were
into
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 the opinion that they prefer traditional human-operated
vehicles
 after observing a
driverless
 car crash news.
Nevertheless
, it seems
advantages
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 that self-driving
vehicles
 could supply not only a comfortable experiment but
also
 a secure facility.
First
 of all, the
costumer 's
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customer's
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 data would be stored safely in
provider's
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the provider's
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 storage infrastructures with
high security
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systems
.
Secondly
,
driverless
systems
algorythm
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algorithm
 could be well-updated daily so that the vehicle could rapidly respond to the shuttle situations.
For instance
,
a
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research from the NY times had
showed
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 that self-driving cars actually decrease the number of traffic accidents
on
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 the same quarter by their quick adapting abilities. To conclude,
although
 self-driving
systems
 have their drawback,
but
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it seems clear that
the
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the advantages of the driverless vehicle
the driverless vehicle's advantages
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driverless
vehicles
 advantages outweigh their disadvantages.
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