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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #inventions #phones
One of the core characteristics of
human
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 race is invention.
Mobile
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The mobile
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 phone is one
such
 product
which
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that
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 has brought
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a paradigm
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 shift in human history. We are now capable of interacting with our near and dear ones on
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real
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a real
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 time basis. We can check their whereabouts and what activities they are involved
on
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 social websites. Apparently, mobile phones are not without disadvantages. One of the foremost
advantage
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 of having
handset
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 in possession is
capability
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 of social connectivity. Due to technological advancement, we can access our e-mail account, bank account, social network websites, etc anywhere in the world.
This
 has reduced dependency on
internet
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an internet
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cafe
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 or wired broadband. We can now use these products to set reminders or schedule our meetings without updating
it
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 in
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the calender
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calender
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 notebook.
On the other hand
,
this
 invention has come up with
psycological
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psychological
 side effects. Most of the time, people are found for
overusage
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over usage
overuse
 of
this
 technology. Sometimes people harm themselves
creating
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 content for social networking
site
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sites
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. Humans are gradually forgetting the art of socializing through small talks. Rather, they prefer to text even though they are sitting in
same
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 place. Many researchers are positive of harming
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 capability to think. In my opinion,
moblie
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mobile
 phones have revolutionized the way we communicate and have reduced
whole
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 world into
small
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a small
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village
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villages
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.
However
,
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over usage
overuse
overusage
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the overusage
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 of
this
 technology can bring harmful effects on
human
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 race.
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