In Some areas of The US, A Curfew Is Imposed In Which Teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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On the basis of threats faced by teenagers when they are outside their home, The US put a restriction for youth below 20 to be at home after a specific time or they can go outside with an adult. In my opinion,
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can have some positive effects on reducing crimes on teenagers but certain drawbacks are
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associated with
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. Following
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law, undoubtedly,
crime
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rate
happened
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young people can be reduced drastically.
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, kidnapping, rape, looting cases etc. must have been fallen down. It may enhance the sense of security in youths as they know that they are not alone. Up to certain
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it is necessary that they are being supervised by their parents while going outside
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night
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.
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, we cannot deny the fact that freedom is
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right of all humans. Adolescents below 20 years of age are having equal
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rights
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to move freely out of their
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homes
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even
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nights
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night
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. It is
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responsibility to ensure their safety.
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, to make our youths more responsible and independent, they should not be restricted by any
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law else it will hamper their growth. To illustrate
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, in case a kid in his teenage
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outside with his parents
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night
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the night
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he will never understand what precautions he
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to take for his safety. His mind will never allow him to make strong and active. To sum up the above point,
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constraints are acceptable up to a certain age limit but
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should not be applicable for all teenagers. In my opinion,
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the right
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to freedom is necessary for all and
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this
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law should be withdrawn.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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