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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The high-level degrees from universities and colleges help get high paying jobs, while others say that experience at work is the main reason for a well-paying job. I agree that intelligence of task will lead to increased pay jobs.
This
 essay discusses points of both views.
Firstly
, We know the importance of education in
this
 21st century. If you want to get a job in any field, they
first
 want to see your qualification. Your qualification describes the particular fields' intelligence and shows you're eligible for employment or not.
For example
, Suppose you have a lot of theoretical intelligence and practical wisdom. In that case, it's convenient to understand real-time work and efficiently task in an actual task environment, so here you're paid for your understanding.
Secondly
, Training is the only thing that helps you to solve any critical problems. Educations can't teach you how to handle real-time challenges, but with maturity, you can understand the actual situation, and you are capable of facing challenges.
For example
, If I don't have any degree in coding,
however
, with my training, I'll learn,
then
 it's more effective than getting an insight into coding, so here you earn with your practice. In conclusion, I believe that some practice with high education is the best way to getting a high paying job in any field.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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