Some people feel that young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others, however, believe that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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have different views about whether traditional identity ought to be followed by young generations. Some support the idea that they should have the
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to act independently whilst others feel traditional
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have a place in
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. In
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essay, I am going to discuss both views. Personally, I am in the favour of good traditional factors which would benefit young
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to various extents. On the one hand, it is understandable why some
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subscribe to the view that youngsters should be encouraged to pursue and protect national
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in their social environment.
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and foremost, traditional culture appreciation is widely considered a vital determinant of tourism because many travellers are inclined to want to experience various rituals when travelling abroad.
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, there is no doubt that adolescents should preserve these traditions to contribute to maintaining and promoting the development of the tourism industry. Another compelling reason is that due to the foreign influence as well as cultural appropriation, some
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are concerned about
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tendency which is likely to have an adverse bearing on awareness of traditions amongst the youth. Vietnam is a perfect example. As American music and films found their way into the Vietnamese media diet, more and more
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, especially teenagers and young adults, become fervent advocates of the
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American
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as gender equality,
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of speech, and so on. While
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shift in mindset can be eminently positive, it inadvertently causes many of the population to start rejecting Vietnamese conventions and unfairly criticising their country, history and way of life.
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, I would argue that liberalism in modern
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, which allows younger individuals to follow the things that they are interested in, would have both merit and demerit.
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, many traditional rules are no longer suitable for modern life due to some unnecessary conventional punishment
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as an unlimited part-time job for females students in Japan, and no one is allowed to use a smartphone in Vietnam traditional school.
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, formal punishments are designed to avoid troubles in children lives, but in fact, these restrictions show that most of these are working against the individual
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of students.
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, if
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trend continues, the young persons will lose their self-esteem and begin to have crazy intentions
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as suicide or depression.
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, there are various harmful effects if adolescents
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traditional policies, which protect them from dangers in
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. Almost all Asia nations
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have a traditional ritual that young
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should limit to go outside after 10 PM because nighttime is a chance for street crimes
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as kidnap and property robbery.
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, the tradition of obeying parental guidance support children to avoid taking risks in their life because they do not have enough mature awareness to cope with severe circumstances,
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can lead to young adults not having enough self-sufficiency and
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struggle to cope on their own two feet.
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, traditional customs not only play a role necessary for defending young
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but
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assist a nation in illustrating their characteristics on the international stage. In conclusion, the young generation
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the
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to perform what they demand in
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but they ought not to forget their roots, and valid traditional
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should be supported as practised in order to enhance civilisation and
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traditional culture to thrive into the future.
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