Describe the person in your family who you most admire. You should say: what their relationship is to you what they have done in their life what they do now and explain why you admire them so much.

I would like to talk about my grandmother, mom of my mom. She has a special place
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my heart
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because she is my main reason
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keeping fight to be my best version. I’ve been living with her for about 10 years, so I learned all vital values,
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as how to be an honest person and
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how can I surpass all harsh challenges just believe in myself, in my own capacity. She was quite
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,
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, if she was
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room
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, she was the
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of attraction. Maybe the main reason why I’m so in love with her is due to the empowerment that she had. She raised my mom and my aunt,
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are twins, completely by herself, without my grandfather support. She didn’t have financial or education sources,
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she was
workaholic
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and she
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evolved
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memorable self-esteem during her entire life. I vividly remember how I love
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her histories and how I inculcated various values of life just regarding her straight and her smart way to live simply and wisely. Unfortunately, she passed away
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summer and now I just have all
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memories and the most precious life lessons she shared with me.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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