“Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.” Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Promoting of
product
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inspire people to buy the thing which they do not need really.
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hand
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promoting
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help us to know about the new
product
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that we might need for better living.I agree on both the point of view.As everything things have
advantage
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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both. Advertising
make
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people attract towards the
product
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,Sometimes it shows more feature
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actually they have in that
product
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and encourage them to buy the thing which they do not need in their
day
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to
day
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life. They might use it for the
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time, letter on they keep it aside and it just
get
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wasted or become useless to use.It mostly
attract
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the children eyes for toys. Where parents are bound to buy for them even though it might be
expansive
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expensive
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and worthless to keep their kid happy.
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hand
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advertising
also
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gives us
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about the
product
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and show us the usefulness of new
product
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which make easier for us in
day
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to
day
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life.It
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give
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us
idea
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in
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which market is cheaper and where it is expensive. Following that we make
a
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use of good budget of the
product
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in
cheaper
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way. Promoting
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help the seller to sell their
product
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by using the cheapest means of communication.They are able to reach
large
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a large
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number of potential buyers where sales staff cannot
reach
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themreach
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.
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growth of information on the Internet has
growth
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the
amount
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of time people spend on it, which has
in turn
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, in turn,
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generated a new market for Internet advertising. And it have both have advantage and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. So, we have to utilize our brain and buy the
product
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which will be reasonable and useful for our
day
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to
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life.
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