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It is often said that retirement is the happiest time of a person’s life. How far do you agreewith this view?

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Every working person in
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 society ,all the
time
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 plans for and dreams for the happiest
retirement
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life
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 and it comes true for some and for others,
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 dream never becomes reality as the other factors keep changing with
time
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 and age
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 as physical and mental health and people around them.I am going to discuss the above-mentioned topic in detail in
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 essay. People in the job industries after working for long years and reaching near
retirement
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 age majority of the
time
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 would not tire from talking about their after job plans and schedule of their abundant free
time
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 ,what they want to do ,where they planning to travel,with whom they going to stay,and how they are going to invest their
retirement
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 funds. For the number of lucky ,people their
retirement
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 in a real sense comes as a reality as they can play with their grandkids ,encourage and appreciate their innocent activities ,travel to the destinations which they have dreamed of all through
life
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, which means
life
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 is meaningful in real sense which is win-win for them, with plenty of
time
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 ,money and with near and dear ones. On the other side, some have
time
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 and money but are either lacking in health or no one around as the children are now grown up and focusing on their carrier or family
life
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 and grandkids are engaged in their school and other activities,so they are stuck in isolation and add up mental diseases like -depression. So in final say ,I would like to suggest rather than waiting for
retirement
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 one should try to live their
life
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 in fullest by taking mini-vacations and breaks from work as if they suffer from any illness or no one remain around after
retirement
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 they do not have any regrets for
life
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