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It is often said that retirement is the happiest time of a person’s life. How far do you agreewith this view?

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Every working person in
this
 society ,all the
time
 plans for and dreams for the happiest
retirement
life
 and it comes true for some and for others,
this
 dream never becomes reality as the other factors keep changing with
time
 and age
such
 as physical and mental health and people around them.I am going to discuss the above-mentioned topic in detail in
this
 essay. People in the job industries after working for long years and reaching near
retirement
 age majority of the
time
 would not tire from talking about their after job plans and schedule of their abundant free
time
 ,what they want to do ,where they planning to travel,with whom they going to stay,and how they are going to invest their
retirement
 funds. For the number of lucky ,people their
retirement
 in a real sense comes as a reality as they can play with their grandkids ,encourage and appreciate their innocent activities ,travel to the destinations which they have dreamed of all through
life
, which means
life
 is meaningful in real sense which is win-win for them, with plenty of
time
 ,money and with near and dear ones. On the other side, some have
time
 and money but are either lacking in health or no one around as the children are now grown up and focusing on their carrier or family
life
 and grandkids are engaged in their school and other activities,so they are stuck in isolation and add up mental diseases like -depression. So in final say ,I would like to suggest rather than waiting for
retirement
 one should try to live their
life
 in fullest by taking mini-vacations and breaks from work as if they suffer from any illness or no one remain around after
retirement
 they do not have any regrets for
life
.
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