Psychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illnesses. Nevertheless, they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illnesses or disabilities, The latter being regarded as a taboo subject sometimes. To what extent do you agree with this view?

In the modern world, it is believed that
people
with psychological disorders are less likely to be accepted by others than those who have physical diseases. I strongly disagree with
this
statement and think that society is becoming more tolerant
to
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mentally ill.
Firstly
,
people
have become more aware of the importance of mental
health
in their lives and
therefore
have become more open to those who have
such
a problem. When someone is mentally ill, he cannot effectively do some particular work duties, normally communicate with others, as well as cope with life’s issues.
For instance
, it is probably difficult for a person, who
suffer
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from social phobia, to work in a team and defend his opinion on some topics.
This
phenomenon is quite common, so more attention is now paid to psychological
health
and its maintenance. The
second
reason
people
with mental
health
problems are accepted into society is that some of them have incredible talents. Children with autism or hyperactivity may be considered mentally ill primarily because they experience unusual behaviours.
Nevertheless
, many of them have shown their interests or talents in music, technology, painting or sports. A good illustration of
this
is the story of a young man who is blind and suffer from autism.
However
, despite his illness, he plays the piano and sings amazingly, which in turn helped him win the prestigious talent show in the United States and inspire millions of viewers. In conclusion, public awareness of mental
health
and the special abilities of
people
with mental retardation has increased.
Thus
, they became more sympathetic to these
people
and supported them in different ways.
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