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Some people claim that genetically modified (GM) food can be dangerous while others feel that it may bring enormous benefits to the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One of the innovations which utterly revolutionised the agricultural industry was genetically modified
food
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 modification in nutrition has raised debate among the public about its safety and potential harm to human health.
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 essay will extensively interpret both arguments and
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 analyze why researchers should meticulously verify the feasible harmful effects before introducing the product. Certainly, GM
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 to solve ongoing worldwide issues. Famine and lack of nourishing components in ordinary field crops and vegetables are essential subjects in developing countries.
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first-world countries,
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,
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 waste is what the government is facing .
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, altered ingredients can considerably enhance its nutriment and favour, one good illustration is golden rice, which has more A vitamins than any other type of crop. It could reduce the amount of meal that has to be consumed to get vital minerals to our body. Another superiority is its resilience. Modified fruits or vegetables are no longer in need of pesticides to protect from irresistible insects.
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, deprived or arid regions can
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 afford to grow their own harvest, as GM yield is not menaced by extreme weather conditions.
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, there are groups of people who show sorely cautions about continuing tendency. First of all, it is
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 the fact that bioengineered resources are linked to allergic reactions and even more serious diseases
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 as cancer.
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 the first vegetable, which had been produced through genetic engineering, was brought out 3 decades ago, there is no all-encompassing research that would ascertain incessant questions. In my opinion, it is justifiable that a person cares about the
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, which is straightly going to her/his body and requires assurance from the founder. In conclusion, I believe that science can tackle vital problems and even help to establish a sustainable future with new modernisations.
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, consumers deserve to be treated better and have reliable documentation, which can guarantee, that none of them will confront side effects.Some people claim that genetically modified (GM)
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 can be dangerous
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 others feel that it may bring enormous benefits to the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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style
Try to vary your sentence structures more to enhance the readability and complexity of your writing.
content
Consider integrating more specific examples to further bolster your arguments. This will add depth to your essay.
structure
Work on connecting your paragraphs and ideas more smoothly. This can be achieved through more effective use of linking words or phrases.
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Your introduction and conclusion are well-presented, effectively outlining your essay's scope.
content
You've done a good job discussing both sides of the argument, which shows a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
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You included relevant examples, such as golden rice, to support your argument, which is excellent.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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