Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment .why is this happening and what measures can be taken?

It has been Identified that repeating crimes are continuing by the
offenders
,who completed their
first
sentence in prison. There are many gaps in the
rehabilitation
system and corruption in prisons. There might be many solutions that can be taken to overcome the situation.
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time
criminals
mostly have not been done planned
criminals
and Most of the
time
those were done accidentally. While they are mixing with the prisoners in jail, they were captured by some gang of
criminals
who doing convicts purposely to earning money by the blessing of the corrupted politicians.
Moreover
, In Sri Lanka
rehabilitation
process is not ending with producing a better person for society, Since after the punishment they were labelled as a jailed person who even cannot find a Job and again they are moving with the people who are involved in criminal and grouping with them again. As a solution,
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offenders
should not be mixed with other
criminals
and
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lawbreakers must be isolated and put into a better isolation system with some vocational training
such
as Carpentry, Motor Mechanic or Train them for some self-employment to earn money after the sentence. On the other ,hand after the
rehabilitation
, Society should accept
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as normalized persons and should treat them as normal civilians since everyone could have done mistakes again. In conclusion, To reduce the
offenders
count there are many actions that can be taken and mentioned are the only fee,
However
, changing the
rehabilitation
system could certainly reduce the no of crimes from
offenders
.
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