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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can case serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with thia statement?

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In recent decades, so many
people
 tend to immigrate so they have to learn their destination country's
language
. Some
people
 believe that If immigrants do not know the foreign
language
 may face several social and practical
problems
. I agree with them and will discuss the viewpoint. the rate of
immigration
 has increased dramatically over the past 50 years because many
people
, especially those who live in a developing country, migrate for work or advance academic study. Usually, they need to learn English , which is known international
language
 throughout the world, as a
second
language
 while their destination nation local langue is different
such
 as France or Duch.
Hence
, most
people
 would have many social
problems
 like communication with local
people
 or even shopping because most folks do not know English. Due to limitations for connecting
people
, there are some consequences like depression among immigrants.
On the other hand
, when
people
 travel abroad to seek jobs especially for most labourers occupations, they do not speak the nation mother tongue fluently because it is not a mandatory requirement in their
immigration
 flow. Thereby, after ,
immigration
 most of the foreign labours don't have an appropriate occupation and even they have some practical
problems
 with their colleges or their manager because they can have a mutual understanding with them about some issues. To conclude,
Although
immigration
 has many advantages for immigrants, know the foreign
language
 is one of the most controversial debates nowadays and in my
idea
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 it can be the cause of some practical
problems
 as well as social
problems
 for those who immigrate to different countries with a foreign
language
.
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