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Nowadays celebrities known less for their achievements rather than wealth and glamour which has bad impact on young people. do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#celebrities #achievements #wealth #glamour #impact #people
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 era,
craze
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the craze
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 for celebrities
wealth
 and glamour has been changed rampantly over the years and
in
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present
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 time they
known
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 less for their achievements and hard work which is setting a bad impact on young
people
.
However
,
i
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 am
partialy
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partially
partial
 agree with
this
 notion.
To begin
 with, celebrities, lifestyle play an important role in everyone's life, are the main achiever of nations pride as they
represents
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 the country by their performing skills in the field of sports,music and acting. Their
way
 of living style has
huge
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a huge
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 impact on young
people
. For
insatnce
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instance
, a
well known
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 cricketer
virat
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kohli
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 has mammoth
wealth
 his costly cars, watches, houses influenced young lads to live life like them but they
donot
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do not
don't
 know anything about their success, the achievements they achieved by hard work, they just seek their outer face and get influenced. Turning to
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other
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 side, the hard work famous
people
 do to achieve the glory and pride, no one tries to find so it is their right to make
wealth
.
however
, its is the duty of infants to look them in
different
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way
.
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example
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 a famous footballer Mike David ,
oftenly
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often
 held charity events for poor young children who has the dream to play for their nation and to become like them, albeit
this
 is the
responisibility
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responsibility
 of young ones to look them in
this
way
,the
way
 they worked hard to get
this
 pride rather than their
wealth
 and glamour. Taking all the
above mentioned
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 facts into consideration, I would
lik
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like
 to reiterate that
although
, celebrities
has
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huge
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a huge
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 impact on young
people
but
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it is
also
 their moral responsibility to understand them in proper
wayi
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way
ways
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