Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion
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the benefits
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a mobile-phone
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mobile phone
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between
teenagers.I believe that its positive aspects outweigh negative aspects.
On one hand,There are many advantages of using mobile Change preposition
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young
generation.Add an article
the young
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,they can be able improve
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about everything only by searching on the internet.Correct your spelling
knowledge
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might expand their Correct your spelling
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knowlegde
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knowledge
Secondly
,they can learning
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poor background,have a chance to find an online job and helps his o her family.
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furthermore
,they'll face with
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unfortunately
such
as,blood pressure,heart attack and etc.Using mobile phone
puts negative effects of
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limited
the use of gadgets at educational places for both professors and students.
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phone
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