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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A
job
 gives an opportunity when
people
 are unemployed;
however
, I do believe that developing themselves for getting a good
job
 is a better decision. There are several reasons why joining a
job
 could be vital with low money.
Firstly
, if
people
 have an opportunity to get a
job
, the family will be happy
that is
 important nowadays, they will earn money whether the
job
 is worst and fulfil self-satisfaction.
Secondly
, it would be more efficient to learn from the
job
 environment because it allows
people
 to reach higher positions
such
 as managerial posts.
People
 could take advantage of their daily working life, and it happens when they involve with an organization. Despite the arguments, I believe that
people
 should develop their skills and focus on self-development as getting a good
job
. A good
job
 always makes
people
 much happier: it is only possible if they can prove themselves with plenty of ideas and qualities in a company; learning and developing knowledge could help pass competitive exams. By spending time on self-development,
people
 can achieve their goals and fulfil dreams - self-development supports
people
 to expect positions. As we know, a successful person who has been working as a top executive could have ideas and enough knowledge. In conclusion, it may help
people
 get a
job
;
however
, to get a better
job
 position, they need to concentrate on their development. It seems to be good that better
job
 positions make
people
 happy due to some of them are waiting to learn while others are joining a
job
 with poor money because they need employment.
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  • endure
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  • settle
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  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
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  • initiative
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