Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree?
Obesity is becoming
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health
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over weight
problem to the Correct your spelling
overweight
children
. I agree with Use synonyms
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government
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suppliers.
Even though parents need to Use synonyms
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more about their Add a missing verb
be aware
children
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health
and need to more Use synonyms
concern
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concerned
healthy
lifestyle. But the Correct article usage
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responsible
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health
and well beings of Correct article usage
the health
children
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of all, Linking Words
Government
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fast
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fast-food
food
chain restaurants to maintain their store all over the cities. Use synonyms
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, which is Fix the agreement mistake
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the
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reason
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reasons
children
are gaining excessive weight. Use synonyms
For example
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children
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in
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to
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dining
dinning
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dining
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playing
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to play
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the government
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plan
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children friendly
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children-friendly
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,that
chance
to exercise their body.
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a chance
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of schools is providing unhealthy Correct article usage
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government
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. Authority can impose Fix the agreement mistake
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, which can help to reduce Fix the agreement mistake
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the number
children
. Use synonyms
For instance
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and Use synonyms
result
shows Correct article usage
the result
children
are healthier than past. Use synonyms
Additionally
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.
In conclusion, People need to Use synonyms
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be aware
about
their Change preposition
of
health
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wellbeing’s
. Change the noun form
wellbeings
wellbeing
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government
should impose proper rules and Add an article
the government
regulation
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children
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food
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government
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the number
children
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