Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree?
Obesity is becoming
serious
public Correct article usage
a serious
health
problem all over the world. It is argued that authority is responsible for the rise in over weight
problem to the Correct your spelling
overweight
children
. I agree with this
statement that government
is promoting more genetically modified Correct article usage
the government
food
and fast food
culture to the people to take tax from these kinds of food
suppliers.
Even though parents need to aware
more about their Add a missing verb
be aware
children
health
and need to more concern
about Replace the word
concerned
healthy
lifestyle. But the Correct article usage
a healthy
government
is more responsible
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responsive
to
policy to promote Change preposition
for
health
and well beings of Correct article usage
the health
children
. First
of all, Government
is allowing fast
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fast-food
food
chain restaurants to maintain their store all over the cities. This
is the reason people are taking their children
to these kinds of restaurant
, which is Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
the
one of the main Change the article
apply
reason
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reasons
children
are gaining excessive weight. For example
, parents in Kathmandu felt happy when they took their children
in
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to
fast-
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a fast-food
food
chin restaurant for Correct your spelling
dining
dinning
out. Correct your spelling
dining
Furthermore
, children
do not have Correct article usage
a playing
playing
ground in cities. Change the verb form
to play
This
is because government
does not Add an article
the government
planned
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plan
children friendly
cities. Due to Add a hyphen
children-friendly
that
they are unable to get Add a comma
,that
chance
to exercise their body.
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a chance
Secondly
, Number
of schools is providing unhealthy Correct article usage
a Number
food
in school
. It is the responsibility of government
to promote healthy Correct article usage
the government
food
in school
. Authority can impose Fix the agreement mistake
schools
Add an article
a rule
rule
to allowed only organic Fix the agreement mistake
rules
food
in school
, which can help to reduce Fix the agreement mistake
schools
number
of obese Change the article
the number
children
. For instance
, Ireland government
recently announced a policy that allowed only organic food
in school
and result
shows Correct article usage
the result
children
are healthier than past. Additionally
, authority is not monitoring food
companies whether these food
are
healthy or not for the Change the verb form
is
children
.
In conclusion, People need to aware
Add a missing verb
be aware
about
their Change preposition
of
health
and wellbeing’s
. Change the noun form
wellbeings
wellbeing
However
, government
should impose proper rules and Add an article
the government
regulation
for the healthy lifestyle of the Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
children
and can promote healthy food
. I believe government
can do more than individual to reduce number
of obese Change the article
the number
children
.Submitted by Leena Kapoor on
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