Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree?

Obesity is becoming

serious

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a serious

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public

health

problem all over the world. It is argued that authority is responsible for the rise in

over weight

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overweight

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problem to the

children

. I agree with

this

statement that

government

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the government

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is promoting more genetically modified

food

and fast

food

culture to the people to take tax from these kinds of

food

suppliers. Even though parents need to

aware

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be aware

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more about their

children

health

and need to more

concern

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concerned

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about

healthy

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a healthy

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lifestyle. But the

government

is more

responsible

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responsive

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to

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for

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policy to promote

health

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the health

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and well beings of

children

.

First

of all,

Government

is allowing

fast

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fast-food

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food

chain restaurants to maintain their store all over the cities.

This

is the reason people are taking their

children

to these kinds of

restaurant

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restaurants

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, which is

the

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apply

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one of the main

reason

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reasons

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children

are gaining excessive weight.

For example

, parents in Kathmandu felt happy when they took their

children

in

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to

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fast-

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a fast-food

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food

chin restaurant for

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dining

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dinning

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dining

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out.

Furthermore

,

children

do not have

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a playing

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playing

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to play

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ground in cities.

This

is because

government

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the government

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does not

planned

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plan

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children friendly

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children-friendly

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cities. Due to

that

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,that

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they are unable to get

chance

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a chance

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to exercise their body.

Secondly

,

Number

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a Number

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of schools is providing unhealthy

food

in

school

. It is the responsibility of

government

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the government

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to promote healthy

food

in

school

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schools

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. Authority can impose

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a rule

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rule

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rules

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to allowed only organic

food

in

school

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schools

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, which can help to reduce

number

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the number

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of obese

children

.

For instance

, Ireland

government

recently announced a policy that allowed only organic

food

in

school

and

result

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the result

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shows

children

are healthier than past.

Additionally

, authority is not monitoring

food

companies whether these

food

are

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is

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healthy or not for the

children

. In conclusion, People need to

aware

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be aware

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about

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of

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their

health

and

wellbeing’s

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wellbeings

wellbeing

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.

However

,

government

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the government

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should impose proper rules and

regulation

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regulations

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for the healthy lifestyle of the

children

and can promote healthy

food

. I believe

government

can do more than individual to reduce

number

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the number

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of obese

children

.