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Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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There has been discussion revolving around the decline of educational
standards
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 in the past years. Some
people
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 believe that educational
standards
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 have decreased in the areas of literacy and numeracy. In
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 essay, I will look into the causes of
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 issue and present some problem solutions to it. First and foremost, fewer
people
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 after high school choose to become
teachers
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 and that leads to unprofessional
children
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 teaching. If there are not enough
teachers
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 who have learnt how to present important
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 to
children
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 of different ages, a decrease in literacy and numeracy can be highly seen.
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, teaching a class of thirty
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 is so much more difficult than a class of fifteen. Not having enough highly educated
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 lowers educational
standards
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.
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, the educational system might be old and do not concur with these days’ problems.
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, solving math problems with old materials might confuse
children
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 even more. Another issue is teaching specialists who are elderly and do not understand younglings.
Teachers
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 who were taught how to teach
kids
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 in the
last
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 century do not understand today’s
children
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's needs and problems. There are several solutions to prevent the decline in educational
standards
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. Higher pavement for
teachers
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’ jobs would encourage
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 to consider becoming
teachers
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.
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 would
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 make more work spots for younger
people
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 who want to become
teachers
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 and would motivate them. Having a young teacher who understands one’s needs and gives examples that
kids
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 can easily take and understand would increase education and motivate
kids
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 to search for even more
information
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.
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, having new books with
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that is
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 up to date would help younglings to find more
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 that they could use
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 conducting research.
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, an issue with educational
standards
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 takes an even wider range of arguments that need to be considered but helping
children
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 learn how to learn and having young
teachers
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 who are willing to teach them the best they can help to increase educational
standards
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.

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task achievement
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea that is fully expanded upon, using more specific examples to support your points. This will enhance clarity and task completion.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure by connecting ideas more clearly and coherently. Use conjunctions and transitional phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing your introduction and conclusion further. The introduction should more clearly outline the specific causes and solutions you will discuss, and the conclusion should summarise the key points made in the essay without introducing new information.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Numeracy
  • Literacy
  • Standardized testing
  • Economic disparities
  • Inequality
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Immediate gratification
  • Foundational subjects
  • Professional development
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive reforms
  • Socio-economic background
  • Engaged
  • Traditional methods
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