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- Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people.

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There is a modern trend, which is more using the
internet
 to read
news
, among youngsters because it can be the easiest way to stay updated fresh
news
. But readers of paper-based
newspapers
 are still a few out of there. It causes elder people don’t know much about modern technology and they haven’t enough abilities “how to access the
internet
 and navigate accurate statements”.
First
 and foremost, it is apparent that we are in a constant flux of the digital era,
therefore
, individuals now utilize more electrical gadgets,
such
 as laptops, mobile phones and so on, in their lifestyle compared to the past. And their demand and customer are rapidly increasing these days and people tend to use cellphones to find information and
news
 due to the fact that they always take it anywhere and anytime apart from sleeping.
For instance
, in my illustration, I almost don’t buy
newspapers
 because I read all
news
 on the official websites or pages on the
internet
 through my computer and mobile phones.
Secondly
, the
papers
, which are printed
newspapers
, are produced by trees. It is harmful to our environment, and we ought to reduce using paper in order to save nature and most people throw
newspapers
 as soon as they read them.
Although
 the rubbish
papers
 are able to recycle, it is observable that lots of
newspapers
 lose their quality and become with dirty things, after that these
papers
 are unable for the recycling process. For Mongolia, reproducing level of used
newspapers
 is poor, almost we can’t collect used
papers
 and there are few
papers
’ recycling companies. All these concerns, I cannot stand the side which
newspapers
 still remains their role in our society. I think most readers are moved into catching the
news
 on the official websites and companies
also
 show the same pattern as readers because they have given serious attention to their company social platforms on the
internet
.
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