childhood besity is becoming a problem throughout the developed world. Because of this, some people think that adverts for fast food, sweet sugary snakes should not be allowed in schools and colleges. what extent do you agree or dis agree with this?

Nowdaysm

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obesity is becoming

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a problem

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for early age people in

well developed

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countries. Some advocate that to minimize

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issue,

promotion

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the promotion

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of certain

food

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should be stopping. I completely agree that

advertisement

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advertisements

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for fast

food

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, sweet sugary

snakes

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snacks

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should not be allowed in schools and colleges. Analyzing how these foods come in

prority

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priority

for children by watching promotion and why they select

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meals as part of

thier

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their

the

meal will prove

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.

Fristly

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, when children watch

promotion

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the promotion

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of these fast

food

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and sugary snakes they

tend

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choose

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dishes because it is as they are healthy,

testy

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tasty

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and easy to eat ,and that

stimulate

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the

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apply

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hunger in kids.

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example

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a

10 year

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schoolboy saw a board

containg

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containing

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a picture of M&M which is a sugary candy, he demanded his parents

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for breakfast

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of

healthy

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a healthy

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homemade one.

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, advertisement of

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food

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in school, college can encourage students to choose

food

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, which has more sugar content as well as high in calories, that could lead to obesity in childhood.

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, display of

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deli and high in

frisctos

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fructose

snakes make their habit to eat outside since it is testy and easily available everywhere. Whenever pupil

go

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to school, college it is serviceable right

infront

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in front

of them and they pick everyday basis which

lead

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to imbalance and poor diet

,

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and result in more fat in

body

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the body

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.

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, one of my

friend

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in when we were in 12th grade used to eat

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high calories and sweety breakfast every day ,and one day

i

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fell sick. As soon as we reach to

doctor

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the doctor

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, it was revealed that the level of hunger and

disturbence

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disturbance

in

digestive

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the digestive

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system causing

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problem.

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result

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he

gain

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heavy weight

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heavyweight

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. In conclusion, in my opinion, stopping keeping

billboard

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billboards

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containing pictures, names and

vision

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visions

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of

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less healthy menus in schools and colleges can improve the eating habit and

food

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selection ideas of scholars.