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More and more people no longer read newspapers or watch TV programmes to get their news and instead read online. Is this a positive or negative development?

#people #newspapers #tv #programmes #news #development
It is a generally held view that some conventional
media
 have been losing their influences offering
news
 for the public.
This
 is because various alternative
media
 have
established
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 and developed due to the advancement of online platforms.
This
 essay will explain both views and give my opinion.
To begin
 with, it appears true that
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 and accessibility can be reasons why people prefer to get
news
 from online websites. To be specific, many
media
 have been transforming a great number of contents to websites and
its
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 applications in order to provide
convenience
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of
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 readers.
For example
, Accessing urgent
news
 has been unburdened for the public having portable devices connecting the Internet.
Therefore
, flourishing online
media
 has brought a great consequence of environments supplying articles for many readers.
On the other hand
, it is unquestionably a fact that
increasing
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 popularity of new
media
 has triggered some troublesome situations in
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modern society. According to a recent study, many people have suffered from infodemic due to many unqualified and uncertified press companies on the Internet. Under
such
 circumstances, readers can easily be distracted and confused state by
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fake
news
 and uncertain information. For these reasons, it has been extremely challenging to handle these obstacles and
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 in order to make better environment consuming
news
. To sum up, even though increasing preferences of new
media
 has some benefits to the public, I firmly believe that emerging online
media
 has caused critical problems
such
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • convenient
  • accessible
  • investigative journalism
  • real-time updates
  • proliferation
  • information overload
  • discern
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • environmental benefits
  • personalize
  • echo chambers
  • political engagement
  • awareness
  • traditional means
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