In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a common trend that businesses nowadays advertising their products which are totally different
than
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others. There are definitely several reasons for
this
,and I consider that it is a positive
development
for both technology and
economy
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the economy
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. There are two main reasons why companies tend to
emphasis
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these new aspects of
this
kind of product.
Firstly
,as we all know,
company
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produce a variety of goods in order to abstract customs to purchase them, which can make
company
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earn enough money to ensure
running
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of
business
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instead
of bankrupt.
Therefore
, they manage to produce
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newer
function
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functions
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of their objects to appeal to the desire of consumers' buying so that taking place larger market proportion to thrive.
Secondly
,the atmosphere of chasing
unique
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and new is
also
a key factor for
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a company
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to do
this
action. People have their own aesthetic and tend to buy new things rather than
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them due to rapid
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development
.
Company
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should cater
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demand, only in
this
way can costumers buy their products so they publicize more about
this
. I take a view that it would be
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optimistic
development
. From a technology
perspective
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company
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would invest
much
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money in researching and developing new skills. The famous
company
Huawei,
for example
,
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put more attention on the production of new goods. Research and
development
investment is the largest proportion of all. Constantly launch of new products with new technological function give Huawei a stable higher market position than others and a deeper
development
for the scientific skills. On the economic level, advertising of these things driven people to buy them, which can definitely contribute to not only the
company
but
also
the improvement of economics.
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Companies
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Company
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should pay more
consume
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consumer
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tax
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taxes
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on their high sales. Government is able to invest in public
service
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services
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such
as schools,hospitals and so many,which lead to
happier
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a happier
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society. In conclusion,there is no doubt that the implementation of business
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a positive effect on many aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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