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6.Some people argue that the fittest and strongest individuals and teams can achieve the greatest success in sports, whereas other people think that success is much related to mental attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sports has become a nation's pride having Olympics meet where several nations participate to showcase their skills and players. What exactly contributes to the greatest success in sports is always a debate as few folks contend that the fittest and well-built individuals and teams achieve significant success, whereas other people believe that success is much related to mental attitude. The essay will discuss both views in detail and states what adds to the significant extent of the positive results. As a game is something to do with the physical body, it indeed needs to have the healthiest and strongest physique in the
first
 place to accomplish the targets and goals. For,instance if an individual is lacking proper health and fitness, he or she cannot be expected to merely succeed in athletics with willpower or strong determination.
On the Other hand
, an athlete who is strong enough and fit is not promised achievement without a great mental attitude as one needs to have a firmness of purpose to shine in spite of all odds be it game or any arena. I strongly believe that
besides
 fitness and a built body, one should have an exceptional frame of mind to achieve prosperity in sports and so both physical fitness and mental willpower are equally important.
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