Nowadays a few people take their family with them abroad whenever they got on a business trip. Is it a positive or negative in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

These days, more and more people taking their's loved ones overseas for professional trips, due to they miss them ,family members.
This
trend has positives as well as negatives.
This
essay discusses both sides, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
To begin
with, taking a spouse and the infant on the business trip is the best idea for always together every time. What I mean by
this
, in these days, a working person does not have much more time to spend with their's families, especially as a businessman,
therefore
, it is the best idea to join together.
For example
, in the recent articles report that 78% of trade person has succeeded when they are taking to their's loved ones.
In addition
,
this
can lead to gaining more knowledge and different cultural backgrounds. Turning to the other side of
this
argument is that, it can be affected that children's academic performance because whenever children's parents go on business trips.
For instance
, the Melbourne Times of articles said that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
In 80% of the pupils have failed in their's final exam, due to going to professional tours with their's parents often.
In addition
,
this
can lead to affect the education, as well as the child, do not give more attention to studies because they will be focused on enjoyment and amusement.
This
is not a positive improvement for the infant's future. To conclude, certainly,
this
trend has equal positives and negatives,
Personally
Add a comma
,Personally
show examples
I think,
this
is a positives improvement, taking families on trade tours is the best plan for will not miss the families, always together with our's loved ones. I hope every business person should be taken with to their's spouse and child whenever they will go overseas.
Submitted by reanudeepan on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: