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Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. To what extent does price influence potential buyers? what other factors influence people to buy a product?

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Nowadays, there is a tendency that consumers are willing to buy the same
product
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 from sellers who
price
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 their
product
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 higher.
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 is true that on a certain level the
price
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 can influence one's decision on purchasing.
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 to the
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, other factors
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 as advertising campaigns can motivate people to buy products.
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 of all, it is widely believed that a
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 with a higher
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 guarantees the quality of a good. Two same products but with different prices may due to a difference in manufacturing costs, and
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 disparity can directly reflect the quality of the
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.
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, even though Apple, a gigantic company in the smartphone industry, sell its products at prices almost two times higher than that of its counterparts, users are still willing to pay that extra money for the sake of its high-speed processor and
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 endurance.
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, in terms of selecting
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a commodity
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commodity
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, people are yearning to buy more expensive
one
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ones
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 because they think
price
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 equals quality.
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, a good advertising campaign can encourage individuals to spend their money as well. Some companies will spend tremendous money on marketing in order to capture more potential buyers' attention. One obvious strategy is celebrity endorsement. These enterprises pay an astronomical bill to the public figures for their endorsement due to the fact that their fans might purchase goods that are superstar-endorsed. In conclusion, while it is evidence that the more expensive the
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 is the more willing the people will be to get it, the influential power of any advertising activity on potential buyers cannot be ignored.
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