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 All cars that burns fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree ?

#cars #burns #fuel
In current
era
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car
 has become
necessity
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 to
everyone
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 of their life. Most of the people prefer
cars
 for their journey so that they can not get tired.
However
 smoke that release from
cars
 when fossil
fuel
 burns, is very much harmful to the environment. In my
opinion
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 fossil
fuel
cars
 must be banned. We all know that air
pollution
 is getting increased
day
 by
day
 and that will affect human health in the long run. From the current
report
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 it is found that most of the air
pollution
 is caused by
cars
. For that Government has started applying some techniques and taking action to prevent
this
. There are some countries like China has taken some better decision like one
day
 of a week is decided to be a
day
 when only bicycle will be allowed to run on the roads. People are seeing some gradual change in
environment
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. But for a sudden change
car
 trend is diverting towards electric
cars
 and that will completely replace
pollution causing
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cars
. As it runs on
an
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electricity there will be zero
percent
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per cent
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pollution
 produced by
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the car
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car
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cars
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.
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Honorable
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 Government has granted many electric
car
 manufacturing companies. As well as Government is planning to make
charging
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a charging
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 station
at
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every 100km. Assumptions say that after a decade people will not see any fossil
fuel
cars
 on roads and citizens will have
healthy
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a healthy
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 and spectacular environment.
As
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a
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apply
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conclusion
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 I can say that all the
fuel
cars
 company will be collapsed and there will be an era of electric
cars
 in future.
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