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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have the opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development

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Traditionally it was common for
students
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 to enrol and graduate from their local
universities
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,
however
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, these days they have more opportunities available for studying abroad. There are some benefits to
students
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 travelling to other countries,
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 as being able to
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 and learn from the best
Universities
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 in the world, learn about other cultures but
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 there are drawbacks to
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such
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 as expensive costs and homesickness. On the one hand, the increased possibility, for
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 to
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 abroad gives them a greater chance to fully exploit their potential and intelligence by studying at the best
universities
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 in the world. Once in
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 kind of ,University the investment of the government to train the best professionals is better than in the local
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. Another benefit of studying in a city or country other than where the
students
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 were born is the possibility to learn another culture that involves, in most cases, learning new languages, traditions and culture.
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, people tend to be more creative and respectful.
On the other hand
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,
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 abroad for a long time in degrees or PHD courses have many drawbacks.
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, the
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 need to deal if themselves and their daily difficulties without the presential support of their parents. Because of ,that the level of stress that they have during their studies is enormous and some
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 often give up on their courses because of homesickness.
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 is the expensive costs that the family need to have to maintain the student abroad, as the majority of the case is not only the tuition cost involves but
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 the rental costs. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of it, we can understand that
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 there are some negative sides to
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 abroad. I believe that the advantages of
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 issue outweigh the disadvantages.
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