You read an article in a newspaper about a city/town. Some of the information in that article is wrong. Write a letter to the newspaper editions. In your letter, you should: • • describe how you know the city/town • • tell what the problems are • • suggest what you want the editor to do.

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Dear Sir, I am Priya Ranjan, lives at Bellandur in Bangalore. I am writing

this

letter to you about an article that was published in the newspaper yesterday. You have written about one famous

temple

which is in Patna in Bihar. My native town is Patna. I lived there for 25

years

that’s why I know and everything about that place. In an

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you mentioned that

temple

is located in Boring Road and It is built 100

years

back which is wrong.

Firstly

, the

temple

is located in Patna City ,not on the boring road.

Secondly

, the

temple

is constructed 500

years

back which has a long story. People of Bihar have great devotion to goddess Durga’s

temple

. It is requested you that correct the place and

temple

origin

years

because your newspaper is popular. So, it would be helpful if you publish correct mythological information. I heard stories from my grandmother and

also

read in books regarding how it is built and when.

Moreover

, change area name

also

. Looking forward to your immediate action on

this

matter. Yours faithfully, Priya Ranjan

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

183 words

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