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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, it is quite common that people prefer to have babies later than it was in past. In
this
 essay, I will explain the possible reasons for
such
 a phenomenon and discuss its pros and cons.
To begin
 with, the possible reasons why some couples decided to have a child at
later
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 age are the positive aspects that it has.
Firstly
, in many countries, both men and women have an opportunity to make a career and become well-paid employees. In
this
 case, some pairs think that if their work and salary are stable, they will probably be able to care for their children more properly.
Secondly
, there are those who want to be more mentally prepared for having a toddler.
For example
, my friend did not want to have children earlier than twenty-five because she did not understand what she should do
then
. Eventually, she got a child when she was twenty-six and felt very confidently.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages of
this
 situation. One of them is the possible health issues.
In other words
, the later a woman has a baby, the more negative consequences may happen.
For instance
, my aunt became a mother when she was thirty-five and it was difficult for her because of her age. Unfortunately, it led to the fact that doctors had to make an operation to save her and the toddler's life.
Besides
, youth usually has more strength and energy than middle-aged people.
Therefore
, they are likely to manage physical problems, while they care for their children. In conclusion,
although
 having a child at
later
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a later
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 age has some positive sides, I think that its drawbacks outweigh the benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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