A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear David,
I hope you’re well. I heard you plan to go camping
this
summer. I’m writing to give some advice for you.
I think you’ll love the ongoing camping holiday. Linking Words
This
year, the campsite will hold lots of activities, Linking Words
such
as board games and climbing. I think you’ll make many friends there. Linking Words
Also
, you’ll have a great opportunity to relax. You could walk along a path across the forest and enjoy the songs of birds. ‘
One thing to notice is that there is quite a distance between the washroom and Linking Words
you
tent if you choose the same campsite as I did, so going to the washroom might be a problem if the weather is terrible. Correct pronoun usage
your
Also
, you may not be satisfied with the food there because most food is cold, so I Linking Words
recommends
you bring some cup noodles.
Eventually, I’d love to come with you, but I need to travel abroad with my parents Change the verb form
recommend
this
summer. Linking Words
Thus
, I have to pass Linking Words
this
time.
I hope you have a wonderful holiday. If you have more questions about camping, please contact me at any time.
Best Regards,
Jackie DingLinking Words
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Task Achievement
You might want to vary your sentence structure a bit more to make the writing more engaging.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each sentence contributes to the clarity and flow of the paragraph. For instance, the sentence about the bird songs can be grouped with other sentences about relaxation activities.
Greeting and Closing
Your greeting and closing are both appropriate and friendly, setting a nice tone for the letter.
Task Achievement
You've successfully covered all parts of the task, providing reasons why your friend would enjoy the camping holiday, possible disadvantages, and a personal note about joining them.
Logical Structure
The paragraphs are well-organized, and the ideas are logically structured, making it easy to follow your points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite