Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

Recently, sharing documents in study or business is a matter of great concern for scientists and company owners worldwide. While some people claim that
this
idea should be encouraged, I strongly oppose
this
because it is meaningful in the development of humans. On the one hand, keeping information privately contributes to the development of consumption and science studying. Obviously, sharing useful data freely enables many people to utilize those for their personal purpose.
Consequently
, it is hard to promote discovery and exploring mysterious problems or phenomena occurring in our lives.
Besides
, particularly in manufacturing, if no shared freely documents, counterparts must invest finance and workforce in researching newly updated products.
As a result
,
this
leads to the appearance of high quality and convenient goods which can meet the needs of global consumers.
On the other hand
, I am convinced that revealing substantial valuable information for free is supported for several reasons regarding economy and creativity. It is noteworthy that a large amount of free published documents play an essential role for scientists in the world. Universally, international researchers rely on previous studies to upgrade their studies,
hence
, they can save substantial time and finance in the workplaces when relying on free old data to enhance going on.
Moreover
, publishing statistics provides references for scientists to create new ways that bring higher productivity for users.
For instance
, in the covid 19, a Hungarian women scientist revealed the formula of vaccine Pfizer,
hence
, enabling global citizens to approach vaccines widely and rapidly. In brief,
those
Correct determiner usage
the
show examples
above-mentioned
evidences
Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
show examples
support me to
believe
Replace the word
belief
show examples
that people should publish research information. As a researcher, I desire numerous
science
Replace the word
scientific
show examples
studies to be applied in real life.
Submitted by tranthuhien20395 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
What to do next:
Look at other essays: