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The best way to solve environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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A human can not live without the
environment
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 but now an increasing number of problems about the
environment
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 that affected
people
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. Some
people
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 perceive that raise the cost of
fuel
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 is the most effective method to tackle the problem. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
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 statement because I believe that environmental
education
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 and reduce
fuel
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 consumption are the best way to fix the root cause of the environmental problem.
Firstly
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, Environmental issues are the harmful effects of human activities. These included
pollution
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, global warming and the greenhouse effect. So the benefit of environmental
education
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 is helping
people
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 understand how their decisions and actions affect the
environment
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.
For example
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, The National Environmental
Education
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 of Spain set up the curriculum and developing an environmentally friendly program to teaching their primary students for fundamental knowledge and skills necessary to address complex environmental issues, which can take action to keep our
environment
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 healthy and sustainable for the future, making Spain the most environmental performance countries and the
air
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 qualities in the world based on their European score.
Secondly
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, using less fossil
fuel
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 is one way to reduce
air
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pollution
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.
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, the government of Japan fighting
air
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pollution
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 through financial subsidies to research shows deterring polluting vehicles from town centres and illustrate how nitrogen dioxide
pollution
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 causes the health issue. So they are encouraging their population to ride a bike or walking
instead
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 of driving.
As a result
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, CO2 emission into the atmosphere in the country is in a significant decrease, making their population get healthier in physical and
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 mental health. To sum up, to deal with increasing
air
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pollution
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 is that
people
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, changing the lifestyle of using less
fuel
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 and give an
education
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 for
people
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 to realize about how
environment
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 issue affect their life is the most effective method to use.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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