Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?
Being clinically obese was once only a condition that adults suffered from, but it is becoming more common in people under the age of 18.
This
essay will first discuss how fast food
is the primary cause of this
growing problem, followed by a discussion of how education is the most viable solution.
Restaurants serving junk food
, such
as McDonald's, are becoming ever more popular. This
is leading to young kids eating food
with a high-calorie content more often and even becoming more addicted to these high-fat meals. This
results in them regularly eating over their daily allowance of calories and putting on weight. For example
, the average meal of a burger and fries contains more than half a child's daily energy requirements.
The best solution to this
is to educate children
about the dangers of being severely overweight. If there was more being done to raise awareness of the types of diseases associated with obesity, children
might think twice before asking their parents to take them to the local burger joint. For example
, the United Kingdom recently banned all fatty food
from its schools and taught children
the value of healthy eating and this
has resulted in an 18% drop in obesity-related diabetes.
In conclusion, it may be true that many of our younger generations are struggling with their weight because of eating too many fatty meals in well-known chain restaurants, but if the education system gives children
enough information about the risks they are taking by doing this
, the problem can be alleviated.Submitted by deepsingh.deepu on
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Task Response
The essay addresses the causes of childhood obesity and provides a solution as requested in the prompt. Make sure to elaborate on each point with more detailed examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing causes and solutions, and a conclusion. Transition words could be added for smoother flow between paragraphs.
Task Response
Addresses the causes of childhood obesity and offers a viable solution
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear structure with introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
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- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...
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