The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The increasing rate of obese folks is putting a strain on the hospitals in an effort to tackle
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the health challenges involved. Most
people
believe that the best way to arrest
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a lot of physical education classes in the school curriculum. I completely disagree that more physical education tutorials in school
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will reduce the problems of obesity.
Firstly
, to reduce the workloads on the hospital settings from fat
people
is for the government to put more tax on fast food restaurants. The number of
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joints has increased over the years due to laziness and high patronage from the public, and
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food contains
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level of cholesterol that causes obesity and other diseases.
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, government agencies should plreduceringent
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on
such
meals to discourage
people
from purchasing them.
For example
, in the
last
decades, the growing rate of obese folks in India has plummeted drastically, because the parliament has passed a law to prevent high consumption of junk
foods
and their production.
As a result
, India is leading the campaigns against overweight globally.
Hence
,
this
has reduced the pressure on the clinical settings in India significantly.
Secondly
, the proportion of weighty citizens can be reduced by encouraging schools to teach more on healthy diets. A healthy balanced diet is very important for the well-being of individuals and should be taught in schools. More so, media houses should publicize more on green
foods
and their importance, as it is very necessary to maintain the blood cholesterol levels.
For instance
, in 2019, in Ghana, many Institutions started taking courses on healthy
foods
and adequate diets, after few years the number of bucket-shaped
people
dropped significantly.
Therefore
, proper education on meals and more adverts on adequate
foods
will help prevent overweight. In conclusion, the high level of fat in folks has put more pressure on the health care systems, I believed that high tariffs should place on junk and the media should educate the citizens on the benefits of Good diets.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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