some people think that a sense of competition n children should be encouraged. Others believe children who are taught to co- operate rather than compete become more useful adult. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

there is a mixed view about whether students should be taught to be competitive or well-cooperated . Even though having a sense of competition can sometimes be useful in life ,

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believe that the ability to collaborate is more important On the one hand, a spirit of competition can be a great source of motivation.

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is because when teachers use games or prizes to introduce an element of competitiveness, it can encourage

children

to work harder to outdo their peers.

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healthy rivalry may boost student 's self-confidence and determination

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while pushing them up to work independently and progress more quickly.

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, when these

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leave school, their independence and confidence may help them to easily cope with competitive situations

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therefore

is argued that

children

should be encouraged to have a sense of competition in order to be well-prepared for adult life. On the other hand, it is perhaps even more important to prepare

children

for many aspects of adult life that require co-operation.

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, in the workplace, there are a lot of tasks that require

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to cooperate with team members , follow orders from their superiors or supervise more junior staff.

As a result

, team collaboration skill is more useful than having a sense of competitiveness.

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want schools and other

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places to be aware of and foster in

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young

children

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can be accomplished by teachers showing

children

that they can gain more from working in a group

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of people are either winners or losers In conclusion,

although

being

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competitive

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cooperative

is essential for

children

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tend to agree with the latter idea