Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted.
One of today’s social issues
that is
of concern to everyone is students
are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet
. While
the Internet
brings a lot of advantages but also
the Internet
has many negative effects and should be restricted for education purposes. Personally, I completely agree with this
view for a variety of reasons.
To begin
with, many students
are abusive use
of the Internet
because the Internet
is very convenient for searching for information. This
means if depend too much on the Internet
, it can lead to addiction. In fact, the Internet
is only beneficial when we use
it for the right purposes. For example
, the Internet
is a useful source of data for students
, such
as students
can search about the culture of the country. Furthermore
, the Internet
can help everyone in the world communicate with each other. In fact, many couples get married even though they are not from the same country. For example
, the Internet
can help us communicate with family and husband/wife by using video calls although
we live far from home.
But besides
that, the Internet
also
has many disadvantages, if using the Internet
for the wrong purpose such
as playing games or chatting all day, this
can affect studying or not care about health. And so that students
are not too dependent on the Internet
. Schools need to limit students
' use
of phones during class hours and should only use
them when necessary to serve their studies.
In conclusion, the Internet
is convenient and has many advantages and schools should be restricted if not students
are becoming reliant on the Internet
. In my opinion, although
the Internet
brings a lot of benefits we should only consider the Internet
as a support tool if student abuse will have negative effects.Submitted by yeshomeclass on
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