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The age at which people have children has risen. Some people believe that because of this, the families and countries will suffer some problems. What is your opinion

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The average childbearing
age
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 of women has increased over the years. A few people are of the belief that the impact would be felt by the families and the countries. In my view, it is better to have
children
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 early on rather than planning parenthood for the future as there are a lot of evolving complexities. In the past, couples had
children
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 in their mid-twenties and a
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 child by their thirties but lately many couples prefer to have
children
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 after thirty years of
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 as they feel it might affect their career and prospects of having various life experiences.
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, with the advent of newer medical technologies like oocyte preservation where a woman can collect a few of her viable eggs and store them for future conception many couples prefer to settle very late. According to a recent survey conducted by
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Oxford University,
children
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 who were born to younger
parents
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 had a better bond with their
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 when they became adults
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 to the
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 who were born to older
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, if people do end up having
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 at their desired
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 sometimes the number of ovarian reserves required for conceiving a baby inversely goes down with an increase in
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.
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 can lead to an increase in medical costs for seeking various infertility treatments.
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, sometimes peer pressure or pressure from
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 can cause anxiety and depression at a later stage when the couple realize that it would be difficult to bear a child.
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, a recent article published by the American Association of Gynecologists has revealed that as maternal
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 advances the chances of having complicated
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 are higher. It is better for prospective
parents
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 to make well-informed decisions regarding childbirth than making decisions that suit their convenience. In conclusion, due to the increasing medical costs and due to medical complications attributed to delayed motherhood it would be better to have
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 at an early
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • family dynamics
  • energy levels
  • financially stable
  • retirement savings
  • education funds
  • health risks
  • complications
  • declining birth rates
  • workforce
  • social services
  • aging population
  • life experience
  • emotionally prepared
  • financially prepared
  • responsibilities
  • parenthood
  • enriched environment
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